by Harpreet Bhagrath | Oct 29, 2011 | Sample Communications
Hi,
I am the managing editor at Trident Media, an umbrella IT company operating several specific interest portals in the areas of current affairs, personal finance, healthcare, entertainment, and fashion & lifestyle.
This mail is to express our interest in holding campus placement exercise in MCM DAV college.
I would appreciate it if you could take me through your campus placement procedure, with information on requirements for companies, timing of such an exercise, etc. My contact details are in the appendix below my signature.
Here are the links to a few of our several portals: (your portals’ web addresses)
For more information on our company, you can visit our official website: your company’s website
Waiting on your reply to take this forward.
Thanks and regards,
by Harpreet Bhagrath | Oct 23, 2011 | Sample Communications
Hi,
Trident Media is an umbrella IT company operating several specific interest portals in the areas of current affairs, personal finance, healthcare, entertainment, and fashion & lifestyle.
The purpose of this communication is our subscription for the IANS feed – text as well as photos. Kindly let us know the subscription charges for not only entertainment feed (RSS) separately, but also the collective feed for a general interest website. If pricing work out fine, we might as well have the combined feed.
Here are the links to two of our portals that we want the IANS feed for: (your portals’ web addresses).
Themoneytimes.com is our general interest portal for which we may want combined/general feed, and, for totalfilmy.com, we may like to subscribe to IANS’s entertainment content.
We would appreciate it if you could get back to us with pricing slots and payment methods. Also let us know whether the overall subscription rates will stay the same or differ in case we use the combined IANS content separately in different websites.
Waiting on your reply to make our decision,
Thanks,
Another sample letter
Hello,
We are one of the leading online publications catering to the Bollywood audience.
Here’s the link to our portal: (your portal’s web address)
The purpose of this communication is our subscription for the Sanskriti content–text as well as photos.
Kindly let us know the subscription charges for your RSS feed—separately for text only, photos only, as well as the combined text and photos feed. If pricing works out fine, we might as well have the combined feed.
Waiting on your quote to make our decision.
Regards,
by Harpreet Bhagrath | Oct 20, 2011 | Sample Communications
Hi Priyam,
We would like to introduce ourselves as one of the leading online publications catering to healthcare news and happenings around the world. Recognized by Google as a reliable news source in ‘health & medicine’, we have a strong readership–more than a million page views per month–around the globe.
Here’s the link to our portal: portal’s web link.
The purpose of this communication is that for the upcoming ‘Breastfeeding Week’ (Aug. 1-7) we are planning to carry an in-depth interview with a senior obstetricians or a child specialist.
Can you suggest a senior specialist at Fortis for us to interview? It will be a face-to-face interview, so probably someone from Fortis Hospital, Mohali will be suitable. We are based at Mohali.
Regards,
by Harpreet Bhagrath | Oct 17, 2011 | Tutorials for Our Writers, Writing Tutorials
After you have written your article or feature, ask yourself these questions.
Have you organised the arguments and ideas in a logical sequence?
- New information after old information and not the other way round
Does the reading become awkward for the reader?
- Transition of ideas within sentences and paragraphs has to be smooth
Is the content informative and interesting (or as interesting as it can be) throughout?
- Find the weak parts and work on them
Have you matched the writing style, tone, and purpose of the write-up?
Have you maintained the consistency of language and tone throughout the document? Has the TS style sheet been adhered to?
Have you checked pretentious language, homonym problems, spelling and punctuation mistakes, vague words and terms, illogical statements and arguments, incorrect possessives, clichés and trite expressions, and other such problems in the write-up?
Have you checked redundancy, wordy phrases, and needless repetitions? Does the write-up contain wordiness?
- Say more with less words, in a way that every word tells
Have you checked your word usage?
- Try to eliminate clichés, and use fresh words and phrases instead
- Try to better your words; see if you can replace weak or unfitting words with the ones that fit better
Any questions on these, just get in touch with the core team — shoot us a mail, message us on Yahoo Messenger, or just give us a tinkle.
Happy writing,
Cosmos Writers Editorial Team
by Harpreet Bhagrath | Oct 16, 2011 | Fussy Editor, Tutorials for Our Editors
Hi, Jatin.
Can you kindly edit The Journeyer copies better in future? Here: http://www.thejourneyer.net/smart-moms-share-house-and-family-work-together-33237.html. This was a very poorly written article and edited equally badly. We need to reject articles this poorly written straightaway.
The issues start from the title of the article: “Smart Moms Share House and Family Work Together!” Share together? Can we share something separately?
The rest of the article is just terrible; weak ideas, presented even more weakly, and one of the poorest diction I have come across in recent times. For instance, does she even know the meanings of words incoming and splendor? Even if she does know their meanings, she doesn’t know how these words work in a sentence. She also doesn’t know how the word fulfilling works, or even break through, which is decidedly a compound word, breakthrough. And all these diction issues in one graph alone.
Here, the original masterpiece for you: A mom taking care of one and all of the family, fulfilling them with all needs will make a break through when she is incoming bucks to add to her function at home. With this additional responsibility she adds one more feather to her hat making her more and more splendor.
Her pathetic diction is evident in the entire piece. Kindly go through the article again to see what I mean. You should have just canceled it; no need to publish such crappy pieces.
I can go on like this with the rest of the article, but I gotta stop somewhere. Better things to do. So I stop now.
Too much work is involved in writers like her. The issue is as much with her English, which is terrible, as with her ideas and the way her brain works; she is not focused on clear communication at all. With non-writers like her, it’s best to just leave them alone and not have anything to do with them, unless they are paying us to train them.
